You're really fucking good with the production, but you're using it to frame another AVGN...without the Rolling Rock.
I love it, but I hate it. Don't use words you'd see on a third grade playground: "Crap, ass,". It's like Uncle Joey's Children's Show.
We can fix this.
Let me help you, James Frank, let me an unknown nobody, help you.
You're going at it like, writing a novel one sentence at a time. I James Frankly don't care about your breathy jokes. If I wanted joke wrters, I'd watch Seinfeld or some dead Pryor/Carlin/Hicks on yotube. We're here for James Frank.
Come up with three points for the middle, a skit for the beginning that's a regular routine you can feed that will lead into your three points, and then because it's comedy you're going to resolve with a happy ending that ties together your beggining and middle. You have your rules of thirds and colors down, it's comedy. Not tragedy. So you use major/happy sounding music. Happy colors. Get some upbeat ephemera to Kubrick into the back ground/some gundam toys that match the color scheme of your record shop or whatever. Around the climax add the most dramatic music/colors and make your major point of the week. Boom. Million sheeple followers who like you because you're happy and make them feel happy.